Alternative Version:
In the process of dreaming up dialogue, I often go through a number of versions and revisions. Sometimes I even letter a version and then change my mind.
I thought readers might find it interesting to see the dialogue that I almost used for this art. It’s always a struggle to know which version is best!
(NOTE: In the initial version, I hadn’t added the Ukrainian flag yet.)
Original Vintage Art & Text
Pencils by Sam Citron from the story “I Lived a Lie” in Diary Loves #9, 1951. Quality Comics. Curious to see more? Click the link to read the entire vintage comic book.
Transcript:
SCENE: Woman in a nightgown who is holding up the hem of the garment to her chin. She is looking and talking to someone off panel. It’s hard to judge her emotion, but she looks a bit disturbed.
WOMAN: OMG! That was kinky, filthy and disgusting! How soon can we do it again?
1951 Pencils: Sam Citron Re-Creation: Diego Jourdan Pereira
Married to a Redheaded Goddess: John Lustig
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WOMAN: OMG! That was kinky, filthy and disgusting! How soon can we do it again?
1951 Pencils: Sam Citron Re-Creation: Diego Jourdan Pereira
Married to a Redheaded Goddess: John Lustig
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“Which is really weird because nothing ever comes in Thad’s apartment. Especially not me.”
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“I better take off my nightie, walk backwards into the dark, and keep calling Thad’s name aloud until I see a shadowy figure that won’t come closer or respond. Then I’ll walk towards it, not bothering to turn on any of the lights. That’s what the ladies in horror movies always do, and nothing bad ever happens to them, right?”
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“I swear. Every time I’m about to go to bed with my make up still on and big pearl earrings in my ears, something always comes up!”
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“Well my husband’s over there with him. I’m sure he’ll ask Thad to keep the moans of pleasure down to an acceptable volume.”
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‘“Which is really weird because nothing ever comes in Thad’s apartment. Especially not me.”‘
My first thought, so it was *exactly* what I was going to use here, but you beat me to the draw!! 😛
I suppose there could be kinky that isn’t filthy and disgusting.
Filthy and disgusting is usually part of reflection and hindsight. “Those were some bold moves! Lets review the tape and see if it worked out for them. Oh, No! We need to turn this off now.”
To paraphrase comedian Dwight Slade:
Grumpy old man: that homosexual intercourse is filthy and disgusting!
Me: so is hetero, if you’re doing it right.
OR…
“Is he coming home already? But I’m not done smelling his t-shirts.”
“I don’t suppose you have any more of that– What did you call it? –Lithium grease handy.”